“Electric Shock”

Author’s Note: This is a Take Ten to Write story and has not been proofread for errors. If I feel inspired or if there’s interest in the story, I’ll post a revised, edited, and extended version at a later date. Happy reading!

Prompt: Write a story titled “Electric Shock”.

I was told that love would feel like an electric shock. My mom told me that, back when I first became eligible to find a partner. An electric shock. That didn’t sound so bad. In fact, Mom almost made it sound pleasant. A little tingle through your fingers that makes its way all through your body. Apparently, the feeling just about consumes you. Your love consumes you. But in a pleasant way.

Needless to say, I wasn’t in any hurry to fall in love. That is, until I met her.

Yeah, yeah, I know that you don’t want to hear about my pathetic attempts at the wooing rituals. Let’s just say that I wasn’t the only one who was attracted to her.

And yet, I wasn’t in love. It couldn’t be love, because I hadn’t felt that electric shock yet. That elusive electric shock…

But I persisted. I kept trying to win over her love. I kept searching for that electric shock.

I never did get it. And boy, am I glad that I didn’t.

Final Comments: My original idea was that the protagonist dies when he feels the ‘electric shock’ from his true love. Then it morphed into the men being completely mind-controlled when they feel the electric shock. Then I realized that in both cases, the protagonist wouldn’t be able to be the narrator…

Overall Rating: 🤔